* 4. Please rewrite this poorly written letter to correct flabby expressions, long lead-ins, there is/are fillers, trite busi- ness expressions, cliches, slang, buried verbs, lack of paralellism, and general wordiness. Improve readability by be- ing concise and utilizing bulleted or numbered points. Current date Mr. Anthony Burciaga Lakeview Systems, Inc. 4122 Lakeview Drive Ajax, ON L1S 7L8 Dear Mr. Burciaga: We have received your request for information. As per your request, the undersigned is transmitting to you the at- tached documents with regard to the improvement of security in your business. To ensure the improvement of your af- ter-hours security, you should initially make a decision with regard to exactly what you contemplate must have protec tion. You are, in all probability, apprehensive not only about your electronic equipment and paraphernalia but also about your company records, information, and data. Because of the fact that we feel you will want to obtain protection for both your equipment and data, we will make sug gestions for taking a number of judicious steps to inhibit crime. First and foremost, we make a recommendation that you install defensive lighting. A consultant for lighting currently on our staff, can design both outside and inside lighting which bring me to my second point. Exhibit security signs, because of the fact that nonprofessional thieves are often as not deterred by posted signs on windows and doors. As my last and final recommendation, you should install space alarms, which are sensors that look down over the areas that are to receive protection, and activate bells or additional lights, thus scaring off intruders. After reading the materials that are attached, please call me to initiate a verbal discussion regarding protection of your business. Sincerely, Francine