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Subject: We have the Solution

Dear Mrs. Jillian Thompson,

Good afternoon!

I understand that technology gives you headaches, and Im here to take away your fears. After a careful analysis of your business needs and unique requirements, it is

our opinion that an ERP solution will, in fact, provide you optimal flexibility while allowing for the sustainable growth that is your organizations goal.

ERP is a set of business applications that coordinates the resources, information, and activities needed to complete core business processes. ERP is a strategic tool to reduce costs, improve processes, better manage risk, and even pursue change. ERP provides comprehensive business and industry solutions, enabling organizations to significantly improve performance by providing web services integration that fits seamlessly into a heterogeneous applications environment, a broad choice of technology infrastructure, and the most customer-focused results-driven application strategy.

• Lower operational costs and improve customer satisfaction

• Centralize all customer interaction data such as marketing, call center

  communications, customer demographics, and customer account

  management

• Integrate different functional areas to ensure proper communication,

  productivity and efficiency

• Deliver personalized and consistent service experiences

• Outsmart and out execute your competition with solutions that are easy to

  use, provide fast ROI, and are available from a single vendor

• Eliminate the problem of synchronizing changes and reduce the risk of loss of

  sensitive data

• Retain and grow customer relationships

• Enhance productivity by uncovering hidden demand and focusing on more of

  the right leads

• Get insight into what to sell and who to sell it to based on the buying

  patterns of customers with similar attributes

• Improve Master Data Management

• Enjoy real-time reporting and analysis

• Improve Governance, Risk and Compliance Management

  Given that your competitors have already deployed ERP systems and have started reaping the benefits, we feel that an ERP solution must be pursued now, so act fast!

  We hope these notes come in handy to you, but I know that changes to technology can be confusing, so Im sure you have more questions. If you call the number listed below, your call will be routed to the appropriate party to answer any questions you may have.

  Have a great day!