Part 1: Revision - Read the following document and identify errors in format, sentence structure, punctuation, word choice, word formation, tone, numbers, or capitalization. Re-write the poorly written message into an effective one, focussing on conciseness, accuracy, positive and bias-free expression, clear of grammar, spelling, and punctuation errors. (20 points) Nannimo Sports Centre Vancouver Branch 8791 Austin Street Vancouver, BC Y2P 2P8 November 27, 2019 Ms. R. Ferguson Ferguson Athletic Apparel 315 Massey Cr. Port Moody, BC Z6T 3B5 Dear Ms. Ferguson We're collecting for the local Nanaimo Sports Centre? We have chosen $28.00 as a fair minimum for businesses to give. But bigger amounts would be strongly recommended Our Centre totally requires your donation. As we speak, about 430 teenagers don't gets to participate in Nanaimo Sports activities unless more money are donated. Nanaimo Sports is a truly worthwhile program. In my opinion, business leaders of any age should support it Tassume you are by now familiar with our organization, but if you've never heard about us, here is the scoop. Nanaimo Sports Centre is an organization for high school youngsters. They find work with local businesses and then form small businesses and then they opperate these businesses. During they operate the businesses they also learn about us running the business, This is good, I think, and we should all help Hoping to get your substantial donation as soon as possible, Sincerely, William Barnett, President