Part 1: Revision Read the following document and identify errors in sentence structure, punctuation, word choice, word formation, tone, numbers, or capitalization. Re-write the poorly written sentences into effective ones, focusing on their conciseness, grammatical accuracy, positive word choice, bias-free tone, and correct spelling and punctuation. (15 points)

1. Of all the games I have participated in, the most disenjoyable one took place on a soccer field.

2. As you look around you, you cannot help but see that the world is developing in a incredible speed.

3. You will have to spend several years at an university if you want to becoming a dentist, lawyer, or an engineer.

4. When I get commented on by my tutor for handing in a good piece of writing, I really feel very pleased.

5. One of the things that a person new to a neighborhood will need to know are what community services can be found in the area.

6. Since Greg lives close to where he works, he doesnt have to spend a lot of the time getting to his office.

7. It is not fair in a multicultural country for anyone to try to disrespect someone who is different from them.

8. When you grown up, you will have many more concernsthan you probably now have.

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9. For a camera enthusiast, a journey across North Americaoffers many opportunities to capture various types of scenery.

10. My Chemistry professor speaks so clear that it is quieteasy to understand what he is saying when he talks to us.

11. The centrality of the new park is the one thing about it that most dog owners seem to appreciate.

12. In Canada, the first day of July is celebrated as aninternational holiday.

13. Though none of the food was expensive, Tanya had cooked everything so perfect that it really was delicious.

14. He is the great believer in taking regular walks, so he goes for long a walk as soon as he gets home from work.

15. It is very unusual to pretends that you have read a book when you actually havent read it.

16. After she have graduate from university, she hopes to find a position where she can be of service to her community.

17. The purpose of the game called golf is to hit the ball with as little shots as possible into each of the eighteen holes.

18. Until I read that novel by Thomas Mann, I didnt like reading, but that book made me to enjoy reading very much.

19. If you can be afford to take a holiday in Honolulu, you will have an opportunity to relax in the sun.

20. Although I didnt know anyone in my Statistics class, by the end of the term, I had made friend with manyclassmates.