Please help me solve this professional communication question:

1: Evaluate the text supplied which is below. To do first you need to state the aims of the text; then you should analyze how effective the text is in achieving the aims

2: Based on your analysis and evaluation of the supplied text, you then draft it to make it more effective in achieving its aims. (it is important that changes you make reflect your analysis and evaluation)

Below is the text:

Bai Li Manufacturing Company Ltd.

Gouliwei Industry Park

Lobang Road, Longgang District

Shenzhen, Guangdong, China

20 Jan 2021

Dear Mr. Li,

My company, RadFlight, has designed a cool new line of motion controlled drones that use smartphones as the controller. We are looking for a manufacturing partner, and your firm is one of the candidates were having a look at.

This will be our first experience of partnering with an overseas manufacturer, and before discussing specific technical details, Id like to explore two sets of general concerns. The first set are the issues that might come into play with any manufacturing partnership, but particularly one located at quite some distance from our offices. The particular questions here are transportation costs, delays, quality control, and the risk of intellectual property theft. Can you let me know what practices and policies you have in place to minimise the downsides here?

Second, U.K. companies that work with overseas production partners face an increasing amount of scrutiny from the news media and activist groups regarding such matters as workplace safety, worker rights, and environmentally sensitive manufacturing. We cant directly control what takes place in your factories, of course, but we would have to deal with the public relations fallout if any problems are uncovered in the factories that make our products. The fact that Apple and other major western companies have spent millions and worked for years to promote good conditions in overseas factories and still havent been able to avoid all problems raises concerns for a small company such as ours.

Please share your companys philosophy and strategies for mitigating these two sets of concerns.

We would like to commence production in the second quarter of 2021, so a quick reply on your part would be much appreciated.

All the very best,