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Good Morning Jonathan!

It is with great excitement that we alert and notify you that your team was selected to host our annual WDSCB-OR conference! Very exciting! Your submitted bidding proposal was very impressive, exemplary, confident, and met all of the benchmarks and regulations expected for this event. We are so happy and joyous to have you and your team on board and are looking forward to working with you and your team. We are just beside ourselves on your high level of professionalism, and we just know you and your team are going to knock it out of the park this coming February! As you may already know, our organization is the leading edge in continuing education courses and is one of the most respected and recognized providers of credentials in the entire world! Our online and virtual courses provide professionals with skills necessary to conquer the corporate world. Dont believe us? Check out some of the reviews written by past course takers! We generate over 10 million dollars annually and have been consistently growing at a pace of 15% per annual year! Isnt that amazing! We have over 100,000 working professionals who have graduated and earned their certifications as of 2021. We also have 150 graduates who annually donate $15,000.00 to our organization per year who have been given the Platinum status as licensures. We like to think of our graduates as family here at the WDSCB, and we strive to make sure their needs and wants are met. This is where you come in, as we expect you to host our annual event for our platinum members. We have allocated a budget total of $250,000.00 for budgeting for this event, and hope to make it one of our best events in years! Our committee has already decided to host the event in the wonderful and beautiful city of Seattle Washington, which is both exciting and glorious as we have yet to host the event at this location. We have also selected the hotel The Reganda selected for both the rooming blocks and the venue. There are also a number of catering services available as well within the hotel, that I am sure will save you and your team sometime. We are excited and looking forward to working with you and your team, we would like to set up a meeting as soon as possible to get seeds planted for this event. Let me know what your availability is, and make sure the meeting is before 4pm or I wont attend. Thank you.