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Q: In what ways does the development of science and technology hurt our world?

While science and technology do help solve many societal problems, they are themselves very responsible for many of our problems1. According to Steven Miller, the military industry has given us some of the greatest advances in technology2. However, before scientific advances in weaponry, humans were limited to bows and arrows and swords3. But, now we can kill many more people with the destructive guns and bombs that science has given us4. Our increased ability to kill and destroy is a serious problem caused by science and technology5. Today we save or extend the lives of countless people because of medical advances that science has provided, but the hazardous waste products that result from medicine pollute our air, streams and oceans and threaten our health6. For example, drug companies7. The worlds political leaders must join together to deal with the continuing pollution of our planet8. And the tear in the ozone layer caused by gases weve unleashed into the environment through such scientific advances as air conditioning and spray cans allows more ultraviolet rays to reach our skin, resulting in more skin cancer9. Steven mentions that our over dependence on technological devices makes us blind to the affects these devices have on our world10.