Document for Analysis: Information Request

Your Task.
Analyze the following poorly written letter, and list its weaknesses. If your instructor directs, revise it using the suggestions you learned in this chapter.
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Planning Facilities Manager
Bellagio Hotel & Casino
3600 South Las Vegas Boulevard
Las Vegas, NV 89109
Dear Sir:
My name is Courtney Lewis, and I was recently hired as the special events manager at my company BareEssentials. I am writing for the purpose of making initial inquiries in regard to our next marketing meeting. Pursuant to this assignment, I would like to find a resort hotel with conference facilities, and we have heard wonderful things about the Bellagio Hotel & Casino. Our marketing meeting will require banquet facilities where we can all be together, but we will also need at least four meeting rooms that are small in size. Each of these rooms should accommodate about 75. We hope to arrange our conference in the month of November, from the second to the fourth. We expect in the neighborhood of 250 sales associates. Most of our associates will be flying in, so I’m interested in transportation to and from the airport. Due to the fact that we will be making electronic presentations, does Bellagio have audiovisual equipment and computer facilities for presentations in the meeting rooms? At your Web site I saw something about using your Tuscany Exhibition Kitchen for team-building activities. But I need more information.
Thank you for your cooperation.
Sincerely,