Document for Analysis: Weak Favor Request

Your Task.
Analyze the following poorly written invitation. List its weaknesses. If your instructor directs, revise the letter. Add appropriate information if needed.
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Mr. Nelson J. Daugherty
Operations Manager
Roxbury Hotels and Restaurants, Inc.
303 Lombard Plaza
Philadelphia, PA 19148
Dear Mr. Daugherty:
Although you are a busy hospitality professional, we would like you to make a presentation to the Washington, DC, chapter of the National Restaurant Alliance. I was asked to write you since I am program chair. I heard that you made a good presentation at your local chapter recently. I think you gave a talk called “Avoiding the Seven Cardinal Sins in Food Service” or something like that. Whatever it was, I’m sure we would like to hear the same or a similar presentation. All restaurant operators are interested in doing what we can to avoid potential problems involving discrimination, safety at work, how we hire people, etc. As you well know, operating a fast-paced restaurant is frustrating—even on a good day. We are all in a gigantic rush from opening the door early in the morning to shutting it again after the last customer has gone. It’s a rat race and easy to fall into the trap with food service faults that push a big operation into trouble. Enclosed please find a list of questions that our members listed. We would like you to talk about 45 minutes. Our June 10 meeting will be at the Red Sage restaurant in Washington and dinner begins at 7 p.m. How can we get you to come to Washington? We can offer you a honorarium of $200, and we would pay for your travel expenses. You can expect a large crowd of restaurateurs who are known for hooting and hollering when they hear good stuff! As you can see, we are a rather informal group. Hope you can join us!
Sincerely,