Rewrite the following sentences using different word choice.

1. Consideration is one of the 5 Cs of communication that relates to the tone and choice of words an author uses.

Positive Versus Negative Wording

Negative: We cannot process your order because your payment information is not correct.

Positive:

Negative: We do not answer phone calls after 3:00 p.m. on Fridays.

Positive:

Writer Centered (You) Versus Reader Centered

Writer: We shipped the order this morning with a 3- to 5-day delivery.

Reader:

Writer: We are pleased to award you a scholarship.

Reader:

General Versus Specific

General: The class was good.

Specific:

General: Please complete the forms as soon as possible.

Specific:

Gender Biased Versus Gender Neutral

Biased: Each person must complete his homework on time.

Neutral:

Biased: Foreman

Neutral:

Biased: The best man for the job.

Neutral:

Clichs Versus Direct/Clear

Clich: Dont throw the baby out with the bathwater.

Direct:

Clich: Its all black and white.

Direct:

Old-Fashioned Wording Versus Clear Phrasing

Outdated: As per your request, please find the enclosed form.

Clear:

Outdated: I refer to your application of the 24th last month regarding your suitability for the post of sales clerk.

Clear:

Formal Versus Informal

Formal: terminate utilize remunerate appeal

Informal:

Revise the following sentence to remove wordiness, to use the correct form of who/that, and to improve word choice.

1. I dont have any contacts that are in my field of study.
2. I would like to land an internship this spring.
3. Down the road, I see myself in a management position.
4. I am fairly strong when it comes to oral communication and I feel like my job really helps a lot with that because I use it every time I am talking to customers.
5. One business professional in my field that could be interviewed is James Joe, my manager.
6. I am a nontraditional student that has recently returned to college after taking a break.
7. It is strong verbal skills that I have developed by explaining a process or concept to a person and by talking them through it.
8. I intend to begin looking for references that can assist me in my job search.
9. The reason why I chose to interview this person is because she is my manager.
10. The money was used to pay off student loans deemed uncollectable by the banks who funded them.