What's wrong with the following paragraphs?

Macro-edit:

(1)Please indicate if they are missing cohesion, coherence and/'or completion.

(2)Tell me if the sentence has a topic sentence and what is it

(3) Micro-edit: Please identify the errors you find within each paragraph.

Paragraph #1

It came back to me like a dream. It was like the time I won the football game and I was a

hero for at least a week. Fragment and there is no such word as "specially" Specially

with the girls, you know. There is no such word as anyways - the correct term is

Anyway and there should be a comma after it.Anyways I couldn't believe it was true.

mean how could I win a car just by buying a raffle ticket, missing a question mark here

and the next phrase is a fragment. But it happened. I was a new owner of a new Toyota

Tacoma. It was great like the football game.

(1) This paragraph is missing cohesion (unity) and coherence

(2) There is no topic sentence

(3) marked within the paragraph

Paragraph#2

I want to major in Criminal Justice. I want to be a border patrol. I have two kids that are

my world. One is 5 and the other is 7 and they stay with my Mom while I go to school.

I'm also not sure if I want to major in History because I like studying about other

cultures. This is my first semester in college after 5 years of no school. I'm nervous, but

also excited.

Paragraph #3

My best subject in school was science. I really loved it. I kinda want to study that in

college so I can work with science things. I think I can be interested in this.

Paragraph #4

She knew she shoulda taken the bus but she didn't. She ended up walking almost like 5

miles and I was like no way was I gonna do that I mean why not just take the bus? But

like I said before at the beginning she was too proud to take the bus so she suffered. But

in the end I think she learned.

Paragraph #5

He started lifting weights to get stronger and look more buff. Somehow it wasn't enough

so he started taking steroids and he got mean. I mean, he looked good, but he could get

mad right away and then it was like nothing. Doctors say they aren't good for you.

Sometimes you get in trouble, too. Although some coaches give them to you. They all

take them.

Paragraph #6

And then she said "What are you saying" And then I said "What you heard" And then she

said "Well I didn't hear you" and then I said "Well too bad."

please help!!