Ryan Abrams, Human Resources manager at Anchore, has written the following e-mail message to several line managers asking for information.

YOUR TASK Study the first draft of his poorly organized message and list its weaknesses. Then revise it to create a concise, clear message. Consider patterning your revision on Model Document 7.1 in this chapter.

To : Norberto Savala nsavala@anchore.com

From: Ryan.Adams radams@anchore.com

Subject: Need Your Input!

Norberto,

It has come to the attention of management here at Anchore that we may be missing an opportunity to find quality new employees. At a recent meeting many of us remarked about the feasibility of an internship program. Perhaps the time has come that we look into the tracking of employees and the monitoring of your vital functions on the job and outside the workplace? Can you think of other vulnerable technologies? What advice would you give someone who is not sure how to handle invasive technologies that may threaten privacy and security?